Saturday, December 11, 2010

Stape attacks! 2

Above is the painting as it was submitted. Below is my bowdlerized version.

Most of the changes I made were in response to the problems I laid out last night. Here they are, with bullets.
  • I lightened the sunlit areas up a little. Particularly the the sky.
  • I turned the mystery area in the background into a row of hills, that brings your eye across the painting and to the little house.
  • I passed the light behind the house, again to get more contrast and interest up into that which I am pushing as the "subject area". Now when you go back there you find something of interest the a lightest light and a darkest dark are gathered about my subject. That gives me a tonal climax there.
  • I eliminated a lot of the trees and varied those that I kept some more. I made their trunks more varied and thickened the closest one up so it would look nearer. Now they are not lined up like soldiers, that was too static. I also varied the grasses at their feet and threw some grass the same color over on the left side of the road to tie the two sides of the road together better. This gives more unity to the foreground.
  • I reworked the big shadow shape on the left making it more irregular, and a more interesting shape interlocking with the shape of the lights and no longer divided by a stripe down the middle. I pulled it across the road up by the house. That decreases the "acceleration" that was hauling you so relentlessly to to the distance. Now it takes you to the house and not past it.
  • I have eliminated a lot of the repetitive stripes that pointed along the bottom of the trees, along the road etc. They were way too insistent and regular.
  • I worked up the figure just a little, reducing the size of his head by perhaps 30 kilos.
  • I turned that stump on the left into a tree that broke the horizon line over there. That improved the balance of the piece and explained the stump better.


Antonin Passemard said...

WOW ! Stape you really improved the painting ! This critique was really instructive. Thanks a lot for the posts !

Chris said...

What a make-over! Great post Stape. Thanks for taking the time to do this for us. said...

I guess my only change would have been to take the scruffy tree out from the left side. But those improvements are wonderful to see because they are simple! I like simple.

I'm leaving for Charleston on the'll be gone, right? Are you leaving any art behind for me to go look at.
Any restaurant recommendation?

Philip Koch said...

Stapleton Kearns- Digital Artist!

billspaintingmn said...

Stape! You could've put a cigar in the guys mouth.
You attacked this wonderfully!

Pam Holnback said...

Thanks so much for this lesson. So great to actually see the changes. I am such a visual learner.

Lucy said...

I thought the painting charming to begin with, even with the mistakes. You did indeed make it better! Could you possibly go to the Met with paintbrush and work on some of those awkward but charming Pissarro's?

Bob Mrotek said...

I think it turned out well with one exception. The defining line or base line of the road on the left side is weak and ill defined. It looks to me a bit "unfinished".

Stapleton Kearns said...


Stapleton Kearns said...

Thank you also.

Stapleton Kearns said...

Yes I think there will be some good art.
Charleston is so full of good restaurants you can hardly go wrong in the more upscale ones.

Stapleton Kearns said...

I of course no NOTHING about digital art.

Stapleton Kearns said...

No free cigars! Not even for digital trudgers.

Stapleton Kearns said...

I too am a visual learner I guess.

Stapleton Kearns said...

I donm't think the Met would like that much.

Stapleton Kearns said...

Gee, looked OK to me.